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Inpheksion
09-11-2008, 07:30 PM
*I added the hyphens because for some reason the forum wont let me indent*
Cody Huber
September 15, 2008
Psychological Perspectives
----The psychological perspective of psychoanalysis and the cognitive perspective can be linked together, in more ways than just the obvious. Although one is a classical idea, and the other a contemporary set of ideas, they do still have their similarities.
----The psychoanalytical perspective of psychology was created by Sigmund Freud, who lived from 1856 to 1939. He was a Viennese doctor and quite possibly the most well known psychologist out of the creators of the classical perspectives on psychology. Freud’s theory was also much more visible in popular culture than the other classical outlooks on psychology
----- Psychoanalysis is also often referred to as Psychodynamic Thinking, and stresses the importance of unconscious thoughts. According to psychodynamic thinking, unconscious thoughts, meaning the thoughts that do not occur to us directly, play a large role in dictating our behavior. Freud believed that the meaning of dreams or a slip of the tongue could all be explained by looking into, and studying a particular person’s unconscious thoughts. He said that although many people do not realize it, unconscious thoughts and impulses play a much bigger role in determining our behavior and emotions, rather than our own conscious thoughts.
------- Freud also derived his information in a different way than many of the other classical psychologists acquired theirs. Psychological perspectives such as structuralism, functionalism and the gestalt school of thinking all received their roots, and base ideas in laboratory research. Freud however, learned most of what is the basis for psychodynamic thinking from one on one discussions and conversations with patients.
------- Freud believed that within each person’s mind, there were contrasting impulses and desires which pushed people to act in certain ways. However, most people are aware of the things that motivate certain behaviors, they wish to be accepted by society and be seen as a ‘good’ person. Freud often tried to aid those patients in finding ways to satisfy their unconscious wishes and needs, at the same time, remaining socially acceptable.
Stewie
09-11-2008, 07:34 PM
Good paper so far. The slip of the tongue you are referring to is called a Freudian Slip.
medalofhonor
09-11-2008, 07:36 PM
Damn good so far :D
topperharley
09-11-2008, 08:26 PM
Good stuff. The middle sentence of the second paragraph is a bit lengthy (maybe move the Viennese doctor part to the previous sentence), and the middle sentence of the last paragraph seem confusing. Other than that, I like it. :)
Inpheksion
09-11-2008, 10:34 PM
Thank you for the critiquing.
The paper is due monday, but on sunday, I wont be doing ANY work
Refero
09-11-2008, 10:39 PM
Wow, I wish I knew about this kind of thing so I could help you more, but it's very well written.
Wanna write my History paper? :p
darkrei9n
09-11-2008, 11:13 PM
You should write my English papers from now on.
Bonez
09-11-2008, 11:38 PM
*I added the hyphens because for some reason the forum wont let me indent*
Cody Huber
September 15, 2008
Psychological Perspectives
----The psychological perspective of psychoanalysis and the cognitive perspective can be linked together, in more ways than just the obvious. Although one is a classical idea, and the other a contemporary set of ideas, they do still have their similarities.
----The psychoanalytical perspective of psychology was created by Sigmund Freud, who lived from 1856 to 1939. He was a Viennese doctor and quite possibly the most well known psychologist out of the creators of the classical perspectives on psychology. Freud’s theory was also much more visible in popular culture than the other classical outlooks on psychology
----- Psychoanalysis is also often referred to as Psychodynamic Thinking, and stresses the importance of unconscious thoughts. According to psychodynamic thinking, unconscious thoughts, meaning the thoughts that do not occur to us directly, play a large role in dictating our behavior. Freud believed that the meaning of dreams or a slip of the tongue could all be explained by looking into, and studying a particular person’s unconscious thoughts. He said that although many people do not realize it, unconscious thoughts and impulses play a much bigger role in determining our behavior and emotions, rather than our own conscious thoughts.
------- Freud also derived his information in a different way than many of the other classical psychologists acquired theirs. Psychological perspectives such as structuralism, functionalism and the gestalt school of thinking all received their roots, and base ideas in laboratory research. Freud however, learned most of what is the basis for psychodynamic thinking from one on one discussions and conversations with patients.
------- Freud believed that within each person’s mind, there were contrasting impulses and desires which pushed people to act in certain ways. However, most people are aware of the things that motivate certain behaviors, they wish to be accepted by society and be seen as a ‘good’ person. Freud often tried to aid those patients in finding ways to satisfy their unconscious wishes and needs, at the same time, remaining socially acceptable.
The two things I outlined in bold felt a bit unnecessary, but other than that it seemed pretty good. Is this a casual paper or the beginnings of a research paper? I see a thesis statement, so you may want to think about starting the beginning of each paragraph with a transition that relates directly to the thesis (ex. "The similarities of the two ideas begin with the psychoanalytical perspective of psychology, created by Sigmund Freud etc."). Like I said, it depends on what kind of paper it is.
Feel free to ask me about anything involving research writing...I'm like a MLA Handbook on legs. ;)
K_rok8923
09-12-2008, 12:57 AM
TL;DR.
I kid, and make joke.
Dr. Wagner
09-12-2008, 01:24 AM
------- Freud also derived his information in a different way than many of the other classical psychologists acquired theirs. Psychological perspectives such as structuralism, functionalism and the gestalt school of thinking all received their roots, and base ideas in laboratory research. Freud however, learned most of what is the basis for psychodynamic thinking from one on one discussions and conversations with patients.
------- Freud believed that within each person’s mind, there were contrasting impulses and desires which pushed people to act in certain ways. However, most people are aware of the things that motivate certain behaviors, they wish to be accepted by society and be seen as a ‘good’ person. Freud often tried to aid those patients in finding ways to satisfy their unconscious wishes and needs, at the same time, remaining socially acceptable.
Good so far, I'm sure you have plenty to go. I would suggest you switch the above paragraphs. You go from discussing psychoanalysis, to discussing Freud's methods, and back to psychoanalysis. It might help the coherence of the paper if you describe his methods at the end. Might want to get rid of the "also" in the first sentence of the methods paragraph too. Hope this helps.
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